Travel
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I think people want successful then should go to travel. Because Travel experience can help you become wider. if you always in your hometown or in one country, your mind stay in your place. So i recommend go to travel experience there culture and mind
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think people want successful then should go to travel.
>>> I think if people want to be successful, they should traveling.
Because Travel experience can help you become wider.
>>> Because travel experiences can help us become wiser.
if you always in your hometown or in one country, your mind stay in your place.
>>> If you always stay in your hometown or country, your mind will stay in your place.
So i recommend go to travel experience there culture and mind
>>> So, I recommend having travel experiences to know one\'s country\'s culture and mind.
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