Travel

2019-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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When we travel to other countries, there must be both fear and expectation for that. Both fear and expectation are about something derived from going to where you haven\'t experienced. Traveling to other countries could be good memories and also it could be dangerous. I could meet many people who have different thoughts and it is possbile to exchange each other\'s thoughts. I\'m supposed to go to Australia and I hope I will be able to meet many people and improve my english skills. However, I\'m afraid of several things. I\'ve heard that I need to be careful about aborigine. And, there are few people in where I am supposed to go to. I\'m a little bit anxious but expectation for traveling is bigger than fear. I hope it will be safe and wonderful working holiday travel to me.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

I know you will have an exciting and amazing learning experience on your working holiday to Australia. Have fun!(\",)

~Lynn

When we travel to other countries, there must be both fear and expectation for that.

>> correct!

 Both fear and expectation are about something derived from going to where you haven\'t experienced.

>> Both fear and expectation are derived from going to where you haven\'t experienced.

Traveling to other countries could be good memories and also it could be dangerous.

>> Traveling to other countries could bring good memories but  it could also be dangerous.

I could meet many people who have different thoughts and it is possible to exchange each other\'s thoughts.

>> correct!

I\'m supposed to go to Australia and I hope I will be able to meet many people and improve my English skills.

>> correct!

However, I\'m afraid of several things. I\'ve heard that I need to be careful about aborigines.

>> correct!

And, there are few people in where I am supposed to go to.

>> And there are few places where I\'m suppose to visit.

 I\'m a little bit anxious but expectation for traveling is bigger than fear.

>> I\'m a little bit anxious but I\'m more excited than afraid.

I hope it will be safe and wonderful working holiday travel to me.

>> I hope it will be safe and wonderful working holiday travel for me.

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