Travel anc preparing of trip

2020-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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[Q] Where/ Who with/ Why like [A] My husband and I usually travel for a week when we have extra time and money. Before the children were born, we did ski or board trips in the winter. However, these days we mainly go to places where children can do water activities. Jeju Island is my family\'s favorite destination. Jeju Island has many things to do, see, and eat. People there are very kind and welcoming. The view from the island is so beautiful. These are the reasons I like Jeju travel. [Q] Prepare for a trip I have to pack a lot of things when I go traveling. The first things I pack for a trip are at least 3sets of clothes for adults and 6sets for children. These take up a lot of room in my suitcase. Most of the other things I take are travel documents, and I keep then handy.Bring sunscreen, a hat, and a charger and adapter for smartphones. I can\'t leave the house without them or I am in big trouble. And I pack some toiletries and items for families to spend time on the plane.

강사 첨삭

You did an awesome job [이름]! Please keep in mind all the corrections I made below. ^^
-Teacher Elise

My husband and I usually travel for a week when we have extra time and money. 
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Before the children were born, we did ski or board trips in the winter. 
>>CORRECT

However, these days we mainly go to places where children can do water activities. 
>>CORRECT

Jeju Island is my family\'s favorite destination. 
>>CORRECT

Jeju Island has many things to do, see, and eat. 
>> Jeju island offers many things to do, see and eat. 

People there are very kind and welcoming. 
>>CORRECT

The view from the island is so beautiful. 
>> CORRECT

These are the reasons I like Jeju travel.
>> These are the reasons why I like to travel to Jeju Island. 
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I have to pack a lot of things when I go traveling. 
>>CORRECT

The first things I pack for a trip are at least 3sets of clothes for adults and 6sets for children. 
>>CORRECT

These take up a lot of room in my suitcase.
>CORRECT

Most of the other things I take are travel documents and I keep then handy.
>CORRECT

Bring sunscreen, a hat, and a charger and adapter for smartphones.
>> I bring some sunscreen, a hat, a charger and an adapter for smartphones.

I can\'t leave the house without them or I am in big trouble.
>>I can\'t leave the house without them or  else I am in big trouble.

And I pack some toiletries and items for families to spend time on the plane.
>> And I pack some toiletries and items for my family that they can use on the plane.




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