Travel Lover
학생이 쓴 원문
If I get a chance, I would love to travel around the world. Specifically, I would love to visit Greece in the future. The word Greece always reminds me of this famous TV advertisement of Pocari Sweat, which is a sports beverage in Korea. In that advertisement, a beautiful woman rode a bike with delighted face and there were small houses with blue color of roof. In particular, I would like to visit Santorini in Greece where the beautiful architectures with the endless horizon of the ocean exist behind. I would like to stay there as long as I could. Santorini is definitely a strong option for my honeymoon.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Su! I would love to go to Santorini as well. I think it\'s magnificent! I really wish you could spend your honeymoon there.
- Debbie
>> This is a good sentence.
Specifically, I would love to visit Greece in the future.
>> This is a good sentence.
The word Greece always reminds me of this famous TV advertisement of Pocari Sweat, which is a sports beverage in Korea.
>> This is a good sentence.
In that advertisement, a beautiful woman rode a bike with delighted face and there were small houses with blue color of roof.
>> In that advertisement, a beautiful woman rode a bike with a delighted face, and there were small houses with blue roofs.
In particular, I would like to visit Santorini in Greece where the beautiful architectures with the endless horizon of the ocean exist behind.
>> In particular, I would like to visit Santorini, Greece, where the beautiful architecture with the endless horizon of the ocean exists behind.
I would like to stay there as long as I could.
>> I would like to stay there as long as I can.
Santorini is definitely a strong option for my honeymoon.
>> Santorini is the best option for my honeymoon.
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