traveling

2011-03-29 · 첨삭 강사 Jessica

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In May, I have a vacation for 6days. I talked with my rommate about what I will do during the vacaion. It is traveling that I like to do most. If I can, I want to travel Europe but Europe is very far conturies. Maybe I can't enjoy the culture and waste my money. Next, my rommate recommended Japan. But thes days there are many problems in the contury. I'm still thinking about my plan. Thank you for corrections!!^^*

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!It's so nice to see that you're sharing your future plans with me and I really appreciate that. Whatever your decision is,just make sure that you will stand for it and you will enjoy every minute of your stay.Take care always.
In May, I have a vacation for 6days.
>>On May, I will have 6 days vacation.
I talked with my rommate about what I will do during the vacaion.
>>I talked to my roommate about what will I do during the vaction.
It is traveling that I like to do most.
>>Correct!
If I can, I want to travel Europe but Europe is very far conturies.
>>If I can, I want to travel to Europe but it's too far.
>>If I can, I want to travel to Europe but it's a very far country.
Maybe I can't enjoy the culture and waste my money.
>>Maybe I will not enjoy the culture and I will just waste my money.
Next, my rommate recommended Japan.
>>Then my roommate recommended Japan.
But thes days there are many problems in the contury.
>>But these days,Japan is suffering from a lot of problems.
>>BUt these days Japan is encountering alot of problems.
I'm still thinking about my plan.
>>Correct!
Thank you for corrections!!^^*
>>Thank you for your corrections!
>>Thank you for correcting my compositions!

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