trip
학생이 쓴 원문
Our climbing was fantastic thanks to the rare sunny weather on Mt.Halla.
It was three times climbing of there to my husband.
It took about 10 hours to the top, the longist climbing time in my life.
The name of the top is Baekrodam like picture that is a crater made by a volcanic erution.
Winter climbing has special attracions to ours so we will try again other places next year.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]!!!
Wow!! I got thrilled upon seeing our pictures. What an amazing experience and sight! congratulations by the way. I couldn\'t imagine myself doing what you\'ve done. Tell me more in class! See you :) By the way, good pictures. You look so young!
Aki~
Our climbing was fantastic thanks to the rare sunny weather on Mt.Halla.
>>> Our climbing was fantastic, thanks to the rare sunny weather on Mt. Halla.
It was three times climbing of there to my husband.
>>> It was three times climbing there for my husband.
It took about 10 hours to the top, the longist climbing time in my life.
>>> It took about 10 hours to the top, the longest climbing time in my life.
The name of the top is Baekrodam like picture that is a crater made by a volcanic erution.
>>> The name of the top is Baekrodam, like the picture, which is a crater made by a volcanic eruption.
Winter climbing has special attracions to ours so we will try again other places next year.
>>> Winter climbing has special attractions for us, so we will try again in other places next year.
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