Trip

2019-11-12 · 첨삭 강사 Matt

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If you would go on a trip,what would you take with you?Many things?However,if you have to take only 3 things with you,think again!What would you take?Money,books?Do you want to know what I would take with me?If you are curious,read more!First,I would like to take Aladdin\'s magic carpet!You have to go to another country,but I don\'t like to spent all my money!You can move anywhere with Aladdin\'s magic carpet!Second,I don\'t have my phone,I can\'t take pictures.Plus,I could not call my mom,dad and my friends!I would take money!I don\'t know much I would take money!I don\'t know how much I would need.However, I have to take money!Without money,I would starve and,I could not go to a hotel!That would be horrible.I need food and water,but without money,I can\'t eat or drink.What would you take on a trip?Aladin\'s magic carpet?Your phone?Money?Or something different?You need lot\'s of things to take on a trip.Taking three things are very hard.So,be prepared on a trip!

강사 첨삭

Hello Rose! Thank you for sending this in! Have a good day ahead!
T. Matt
If you would go on a trip,what would you take with you?
>> If you would go on a trip, what would you take with you?
Many things?
>> Correct
However,if you have to take only 3 things with you,think again!
>>However, if you have to take only 3 things with you, think again!
What would you take?Money,books?
>>What would you take? Money, books?
Do you want to know what I would take with me?
>> Correct
If you are curious,read more!
>> If you are curious, read more!
First,I would like to take Aladdin\'s magic carpet!
>>First, I would like to take Aladdin\'s magic carpet!
You have to go to another country,but I don\'t like to spent all my money!
>>You can go to another country without spending money!
You can move anywhere with Aladdin\'s magic carpet!
>> Correct
Second,I don\'t have my phone,I can\'t take pictures.
>>Second, I don\'t have a phone so I can\'t take pictures.
Plus,I could not call my mom,dad and my friends!
>> Plus, I could not call my mom, dad and my friends!
I would take money!
>> Correct
I don\'t know much I would take money!
>> I don\'t know how much money I would take!
I don\'t know how much I would need.
>> Correct
However, I have to take money!
>> Correct
Without money,I would starve and,I could not go to a hotel!
>>Without money, I would starve and, I could not go to a hotel!
That would be horrible.
>> Correct
I need food and water,but without money,I can\'t eat or drink.
>>I need food and water, but without money, I can\'t eat or drink.
What would you take on a trip?
>> Correct
Aladin\'s magic carpet?
>>Aladdin\'s magic carpet?
Your phone?Money?Or something different?
>>Your phone? Money? Or something different?
You need lot\'s of things to take on a trip.
>> Correct
Taking three things are very hard.
>>Taking only three things is very hard.
So,be prepared on a trip!
>>So, be prepared when going on a trip!

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