Trip to Macao

2010-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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Macao has a tragic history It had been under the control of Portugal for over 400 years. As we went around the streets, we realized what the freedom was. As we saw how they lived, we realized what the happiness was. As we experienced their nightlife, we realized what the passion was. Though I stayed there for a short time, It was very good. and I think this memory will remain forever. Macao is the most beautiful country I have ever been to.

강사 첨삭

Great Monday [이름]! You made a very impressive narration here. Keep it up! -Teacher JM Macao has a tragic history >>>Correct^^It had been under the control of Portugal for over 400 years. >>>Correct^^ As we went around the streets, we realized what the freedom was. >>>As we went around the streets, we realized what freedom actually meant. As we saw how they lived, we realized what the happiness was. >>>As we saw how they lived, we realized the meaning of happiness. As we experienced their nightlife, we realized what the passion was. >>>As we experienced their nightlife, we realized passion. Though I stayed there for a short time, It was very good. >>>Though I stayed there for a short time, it still was a very good experience for me. and I think this memory will remain forever. >>> Correct^^ Macao is the most beautiful country I have ever been to. >>>Macao is the most beautiful REGION I have ever been to.  

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