true success consists of personal fulfillment rather than monetary gain

2015-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think it depends on the aim. If someone think that the success is making a lot of money. However, he achieves his goal if he can't earn a money he might think I'm failure. On the other hands, if he set his goal to get a personal fulfillment, he earn much money but doesn't feel personal fulfillment, he might feel failure. Someone say that earn much money, the fulfillment is naturally following. However, another person says even though we can't earn money we keep doing something with fulfillment, the money will follow. Personally, I prefer the last one.

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A beautiful Wednesday to you [이름]! ^^ Money is important because it\'s a tool for us to acquire our basic needs such as food, clothing and shelter. However, doing the things that you love is far more important because it provides you a sense of fulfillment and satisfaction. Doing a work that pays well only provides temporary happiness because money can only provide you material things. Money is important but it should not be the highest priority in our lives. Money should not be the source of our happiness but rather a tool to help us and our loved ones achieve happiness. It\'s okay to aim for a high-paying job. There\'s nothing wrong with that. But the key to stay happy, aside from the high salary that you get is, you should be doing something because you love it. Otherwise, you lose the drive to perform well. On the other hand, it is necessary to love your job whatever it may be. Thank you very much for this composition [이름]. I am once again reminded of the reason why I teach. I hope you are having a wonderful day. See you again tomorrow. Take care always. ~Teacher Charry  I think it depends on the aim. >> CORRECT! OR >> I think it depends on the goal.If someone think that the success is making a lot of money. >> Some people think that success is just all about making a lot of money. However, he achieves his goal if he can\'t earn a money he might think I\'m failure. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Even if a person attains his goal, if he doesn\'t earn a lot of money, he might think he\'s a failure. On the other hands, if he set his goal to get a personal fulfillment, he earn much money but doesn\'t feel personal fulfillment, he might feel failure. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: On the other hand, if a person would only set his goal for his own benefit, he might earn much money but won\'t get personal fulfillment and in the end also feel like a failure. Someone say that earn much money, the fulfillment is naturally following. >> Someone once said that when you earn much money, fulfillment will naturally follow. However, another person says even though we can\'t earn money we keep doing something with fulfillment, the money will follow. >> However, another person said even though we don\'t earn much money if we keep on doing something that fulfill us, the money will follow. Personally, I prefer the last one. >> CORRECT! OR >> If you would ask me, I would prefer the last one.

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