Tuesday homework
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Claire\'s homework
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Hello Claire!
Thank you for making your composition today. You did really well. Keep it up! ^^
~~teacher Kate
I like any outdoor activity without visit to museum.
>>I like all outdoor activities except visiting the museum.
Visit museum is so boring.
>>Visiting the museum is so boring.
But my favorite outdoor activity is play in the amusement [이름] and having a picnic.
>>But my favorite outdoor activity is playing in the amusement [이름] and having a picnic.
Because when we visit amusement [이름] we can have many photo shoots and feel like I’m in the dream world.
>>CORRECT!
Usually when we had a huge cotton candy and riding rides.
>>Usually we get a huge cotton candy and enjoy the rides.
For picnic we can play frisbee and if I’m hungry I can eat sandwich with double cheese.
>>CORRECT!
And for better we can eat cold icy orange juice with double cheese sandwiches.
>>It will be much better if we can eat cold and icy orange juice with double cheese sandwiches.
Also when we are eating outside even not tasty home made food is feeling really nice!
>>Also, when we eat outside, even regular home made food tastes really nice!
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