Tuesday homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
Do you think you will live until a ripe old age? Why or why not?
I think I can live until old age.
Firsts, technology development.
Nowadays technology has been developed and developing in a very fast time.
As technology develops, people live older and older.
Therefore I think I can live old if I grow up like this without any accidents.
Second, health.
Just like I said in an upper sentence, as technology develops, medical science will naturally develop.
Thus I can be cured safely, quickly, and easily.
Many illnes can be fixed in the future by the development of technology.
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
Great job today. Thanks for the effort ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>I think I can live to a ripe old age.
Firsts, technology development.
Firsts, technology development.
>>First, there is the development of technology.
Nowadays technology has been developed and developing in a very fast time.
Nowadays technology has been developed and developing in a very fast time.
>>Nowadays technology has been developed and still developing quickly.
As technology develops, people live older and older.
As technology develops, people live older and older.
>>As technology develops, people\'s life expectancy increases.
Therefore I think I can live old if I grow up like this without any accidents.
Therefore I think I can live old if I grow up like this without any accidents.
>>CORRECT!
Second, health.
Second, health.
>>Second is health.
Just like I said in an upper sentence, as technology develops, medical science will naturally develop.
Just like I said in an upper sentence, as technology develops, medical science will naturally develop.
>>Just like I said previously, as technology develops, medical science will naturally develop.
Thus I can be cured safely, quickly, and easily.
Thus I can be cured safely, quickly, and easily.
>>CORRECT!
Many illnes can be fixed in the future by the development of technology.
Many illnes can be fixed in the future by the development of technology.
>>Many illnesses can be cured in the future by the development of technology.
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