Tuesday homework

Hello [이름]!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:

I\'m not sure what business it would be but I think it would be about science and it will need high technology.

>> CORRECT!
First, I am interested in science especially biology, so I think it would be about science if I had a business.

>> First of all, I am interested in science especially biology, so I think it would be about science if I have a business.
Second, I think human need to invent advanced things.

>> Second, I think humans need to invent advanced things.
And if a person want to invent advanced thing, then it would need high technology.

>> Plus, if a person wants to invent advanced things, then they would need high technology.
And I want to invent something new and advanced thing, so if I had a business, then it will need high technology.

>> I want to invent something new and advanced so that requires advanced technology as well.