Tuesday, September 14, 2021 Claire

2021-09-18 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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HOMEWORK(Claire)

강사 첨삭

Hello Claire!

Thanks for your efforts this week! Have a happy Chu[이름]k with your family. 

~~Teacher Kate


I’m scared of some stuff that my friends are also scared of.

>>CORRECT!

First, horror stories.

>>First, it\'s horror stories. 

I don’t believe ghosts but I’m scared of hearing spooky legend stories that ghosts appear in.

>>I don’t believe in ghosts but I’m scared of listening to spooky legends where ghosts appear in.

Because scary legend stories make me imagine of them.

>>Because scary legends make me imagine of them.

When I keep images of them, I keep images of scary faces of ghosts.

>>When I imagine them, I also keep imagining the scary face 

I’m not scared because I believe ghosts but as I said above, I don’t like the cruel and scary faces of ghosts.

>>I’m not scared because I believe in ghosts but as I said above, I don’t like the cruel and scary faces of ghosts.

Their faces keep appearing when I close my eyes after seeing or hearing horror stories.

>>CORRECT!

Second, insects.

>>Second, they are insects. 

I think this is a different kind of fierce but I’m also scared of seeing, touching, or listening to bugs.

>>I think this is a different kind of fear but I’m also scared of seeing, touching, or listening to bugs.

I hate every part of bugs.

>>CORRECT!

Even butterflies. When we see closely at butterflies, their body looks like caterpillars.

>>I\'m even scared of butterflies. When I look at them closely, their bodies look like caterpillars. 

Third, I’m scared of something that is unknown.

>>CORRECT!

I think this kind of scariness is human essence.

>>I think this kind of fear is part of human nature.

Humans have natural scariness with unknown things.

>>Humans have a natural fear of the unknown.

However, I’m scared of unknown things such as the deep sea, or space.

>>CORRECT!

When I imagine myself under the deep sea, sometimes I feel weird for no reason.

>>CORRECT!

Also, if I think of space and an unknown creature in space, I feel weird again.

>>CORRECT!

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