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Once upen up time there was a 17 years old boy and a girl lived in New York. They liked traveling around the world. One day,found special three maps.In the second floor.In their house. And they,opened the map.Wow! they was surprised. becausae It was a traveling sround the world map. So they asked their parents to allowed them. And they allowed to traveling around the world. They was very happy.l So they went outside. First,they go to the south U.S.A. There was a desert. So everyone doesn't want to live in there. And a month ago. THey visited.Japan,India,Korea,China,Africa,Frence,Enaland,Thailand. They met the visiters and talked with them. Last,they visited the nail Liver and Canada. Oh,they didn't see famous cattle in Pilpin. THey had a great a great time in there. And they had a lecord 2 year. Great job. Them,what are they going to traveling? Well........... I don't know maybe. but they will see many kinds og animals in their country. I will tell you next time.

Hello Justin! This is an interesting story. I hope you can tell me more about it next time! ^^ I made some corrections here, please review them and try not to make the same mistakes next time okay? Enjoy the holiday tomorrow! CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ Once upen up time there was a 17 years old boy and a girl lived in New York. >> Once upon a time, there was a 17-year-old boy and girl who lived in New York.They liked traveling around the world. >> CORRECTOne day,found special three maps.>> One day, they found three special maps. In the second floor.In their house. >> It was in the second floor of their house.And they,opened the map. >> They looked at the map. Wow! they was surprised. >> Wow! They were surprised!becausae It was a traveling sround the world map. >> Because it was a traveling map which shows the whole world.So they asked their parents to allowed them. >> So they asked their parents to allow them to travel. OR >> They asked for their parents\' permission.And they allowed to traveling around the world. >> They were allowed to travel around the world.They was very happy. >> They were very happy.So they went outside. >> CORRECTFirst,they go to the south U.S.A. >> First, they went to South America.There was a desert. So everyone doesn\'t want to live in there. >> It was mostly desert so they don\'t want to live in there.And a month ago. THey visited.Japan,India,Korea,China,Africa,Frence,Enaland,Thailand. >> A month ago they visited Japan, India, Korea, China, Africa, France, England and Thailand. They met the visiters and talked with them. >> They met some foreigners and talked with them.Last, they visited the nail Liver and Canada. >> Lastly, they visited the Nile River and Canada.Oh,they didn\'t see famous cattle in Pilpin. >> But they didn\'t get to see the famous cattle in the Philippines.THey had a great a great time in there. >> They had a great time in there.And they had a lecord 2 year. >> They were able to travel around the world in a span of 2 years. Great job. >> CORRECTThem,what are they going to traveling? >> Where are they going to travel next?Well........... >> CORRECT OR >> Well...I don\'t know maybe. >> I\'m not sure.but they will see many kinds og animals in their country. >> But they can see different kinds of animals in their country.I will tell you next time. >> CORRECT