Typhoon I've experenced on Thursday

2010-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Nicole

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I have a hard time falling asleep for over a month. On Thursday, it was not an exception so that I was up until 5am. Then, finally, I was about to go to bed but very stong wind brew and it wake me up. I'd never heard the sound window was being broken by winds. My mother said that I shouldn't go to school since it was so dangerous if I was hit by something such as signs attached on the wall. However, I had to go to school since if I had missed the classes, I wouldn't have made up for them. The influence of the typhoon was very strong. When the professor was checking attendance, there was a student who coudln't go to school because the ground section of the Seoul metro was out of service.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for this composition, [이름], typhoons are really scary. Just be careful and always stay indoors during those time! See you in class! =) Have a great day! I have a hard time falling asleep for over a month.  >>correct >>I have a hard time falling asleep for over a month now.             >>better On Thursday, it was not an exception so that I was up until 5am. >>except last Thursday, I was up until 5am. Then, finally, I was about to go to bed but very stong wind brew and it wake me up. >>When I was about to go to bed, the wind blew so strong and kept me awake. I'd never heard the sound window was being broken by winds. >>I’ve never heard of the wind blew so strong before that it caused windows to break too. My mother said that I shouldn't go to school since it was so dangerous if I was hit by something such as signs attached on the wall. >>My mother said that I shouldn’t go to school because it is dangerous. There were flying objects caused by the wind that might possibly hit me. However, I had to go to school since if I had missed the classes, I wouldn't have made up for them. >>However, I still need to go to school, because if I miss anything, I wouldn't be able to have a make-up class for it. The influence of the typhoon was very strong.  >>The typhoon was really strong. When the professor was checking attendance, >>When the professor checked our attendance, there was a student who coudln't go to school because the ground section of the Seoul metro was out of service. >>there was a student who couldn't  come to school because the ground section of Seoul metro was out of service.    

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