typical familly.
학생이 쓴 원문
In my country, Korea, most familly is consist of 4 or 5.
Mother, Father and daughter and son. it's number is decided depend on a parent's wish. ^^;;
For now, Korean has accepted only Korean family but It is getting changed gradually.
We welcome other country family.
I heard about gay couples in my country.
I don't know whether it is good or bad. but I'm certain that It's number is increasing in these days.
In rural side, their are lots of old people living in there.
They are living with their son and grand son, but very few people are living like that.
I told you that Korea, most familly is consist of 4 or 5. So many older person whose child has own home are living in rural side aparted from their children.
as life style is changing, as the way people think is changing.
강사 첨삭
Hello there again.
Thank you for doing your homework.
I hope that you had a great time this long holiday.
I totally agree with you.
We experience a lot of changes these days.
We should always be strong to overcome all the trials that will come our way.
Talk to you in class.
Please go over the corrections below.
Teacher Nina
>> In Korea, most families consist of four to five members.
>> OR: In my country, most families consist of four to five members.
Mother, Father and daughter and son.
>> A mother, father, a daughter and a son.
Mother, Father and daughter and son.
>> A mother, father, a daughter and a son.
it\'s number is decided depend on a parent\'s wish. ^^;;
>> The number of kids depend on the parents wish.
>> OR: The number of kids in the family is decided by the parents.
For now, Korean has accepted only Korean family but It is getting changed gradually.
For now, Korean has accepted only Korean family but It is getting changed gradually.
>> Did you mean: These days, Koreans accepted the concept of a Korean family but it is changing gradually.
We welcome other country family.
We welcome other country family.
>> We welcome other countries family.
>> OR: We welcome the concept of families in Western countries.
I heard about gay couples in my country.
I heard about gay couples in my country.
>> Correct!
I don\'t know whether it is good or bad.
I don\'t know whether it is good or bad.
>> Correct!
but I\'m certain that It\'s number is increasing in these days.
>> But I\'m certain that the number is increasing these days.
In rural side, their are lots of old people living in there.
>> In the rural side, there are lots of old people who are living there.
They are living with their son and grand son, but very few people are living like that.
>> Correct!
I told you that Korea, most familly is consist of 4 or 5.
I told you that Korea, most familly is consist of 4 or 5.
>> I told you that families in Korea consist of four to five members.
as life style is changing, as the way people think is changing.
So many older person whose child has own home are living in rural side aparted from their children.
>> So, many old people whose child has his/her own home are living in rural areas apart from their children.
>> So, many old people whose child has his/her own home are living in rural areas apart from their children.
as life style is changing, as the way people think is changing.
>> As a person\'s lifestyle is changing, his/ her perspective changes as well.
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