Umbrellas
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I gave it a try to upload a text file. which one do you prefer between the former one and this one?
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Hello [이름],
At first, it would be difficult to change your old ways, but once you train yourself from achieving the things you want to change. It will become a habit and you won\'t forget anymore.
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As a child, I was someone who always forgot to bring something every time I was about to leave home.>>As a child, I was someone who always forgets to bring something every time before I leave home.
When it rained one day, it was the day when I got a new umbrella.
>>It rained the other day and it was the day I got a new umbrella.
and I put it anywhere carelessly, forgetting that it was necessary the next.
>>I carelessly put it somewhere and unknowingly forgot where I left it.
The next time it rained , I always failed to remember where I put the umbrella and then, I just admitted to lose it and bought another one.
>>The next time it rained again and I failed to remember where I put the umbrella so I just presumed to have lost it and bought another one.
and the perverse habit made me mad at myself every time it rained and every time I needed an umbrella.
>>And the perverse habit made me mad at myself every time it rains and whenever I need an umbrella.
What\'s worse is that that continues to happen to me.
>>What\'s worst is that it always happens to me.
Anyway, a few day ago, I saw the need to break this terrible habit so I made sure not to pay for unnecessary, extra purchases every time it rained.
>>Anyway, a few days ago, I saw the need to break this terrible habit so I made sure not to pay for unnecessary, extra purchases every time it rains.
I had a few ways to get rid of the habit that I\'d come up with.
>>I have few ways to get rid of this habit which I have to cope up with.
The first one was to check the weather before I went out. but what made this plan messed up was that, sure enough, I forgot checking the weather, wearing shoes.
>>First, I have to check the weather forecast before I go out but my plans messed up because I forgot to check and I was wearing shoes.
The second was to take a note that reminded me of things I should be with me.
Second, I should take note to be reminded of the things I need to bring with me.
Of course, I forgot to take a note as well as I lost the note eventually.
>>Of course, I forgot to take a note thus I lost the note eventually.
The last way was to ask my parents to tell me to take things with me.
>>And lastly, I asked my parents to remind me of the things that I need to bring with me.
But, afterwards, I found they were my parents and there was something running in my family.
>>But afterward, I found out that it runs in the family.
we are the family that spends a lot of money on an umbrella. by the way, my father taught me that I want to put umbrellas on the same place. >>My family spends a lot of money on umbrellas. By the way, my father taught me to put my umbrella in the same place all the time.
Still, I don\'t expect it to work. >>correct I gave it a try to upload a text file.
>>correct
which one do you prefer between the former one and this one?
>>correct ( I prefer the former)
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