unbalanced diet

2011-03-07 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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I am a man who eats only what I like. When I was young, my parents worried about my bad habit about habits. Because I didn't eat vegetables. I'm getting older, I'm better.so I don't worry about that.people who know me worry about me. I think I'm getting better. At first, I didn't eat all kind of vegetables except kim-chi. I watched people's actions,I found out that most of people have habits that they don't like.I tried to think about bad habits. what is bad habits? what standard do they divie? I realized that everybody admited that action is good like early wake up and so on. There are lots of books. It make people encourged and changed. But it sometimes make us stressful and give all things up. Because It looks easy but follows them is really difficult.

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Hi [이름]!!! Thanks for your composition. Kindly check on it and review the corrections. Thanks Lei J   I am a man who eats only what I like. >>I am a person who eats only those food that I like to eat. When I was young, my parents worried about my bad habit about eating. >>correct Because I didn't eat vegetables. >>correct I'm getting older, I'm better. >>I getting better as I grow older. so I don't worry about that. >>correct people who know me worry about me. >>correct I think I'm getting better. >>correct At first, I didn't eat all kind of vegetables except kim-chi. >>At first, I donut like eating vegetables except for kimchi. I watched people's actions,I found out that most of people have habits that they don't like. >>correct I tried to think about bad habits. >>correct what is bad habits? >>What are bad habits? what standard do they divie? >>correct I realized that everybody admited that action is good like early wake up and so on. >>I realized that everybody admits that such actions are good like waking up early in the morning. There are lots of books. >>correct It make people encourged and changed. >>It encourages people and change them. But it sometimes make us stressful and give all things up. >>But it sometimes causes stress. Because It looks easy but follows them is really difficult. >>Because it looks easy but following them is really difficult.

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