undue favor for high ranking official's children

2010-09-10 · 첨삭 강사 Nicole

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It turned out the ministor of foreign affair and trade whose daughter received undue favor on copetition for a high ranking public servant. It is so unfair since it removed the opportunities from the peopl who are preparing for the position for a long time. Meanwhile, There have been many scandals related to misused power such as receiving bribe, finding a loophole to avoid paying taxes, and breaking the law. That's why Korean society now is having a hard time to be integreted. The public don't believe high ranking people at society so that they don't want to follow those people. The public should be more aware of what they are doing and apply strict stardard about integrity for them.

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Good day [이름] Thank you for sharing all of your ideas with regards to our subject matters and you are really doing great. I am so pleased to have you as my student. Hope you will have a great weekend! Looking forward to seeing you again next week. Nicole   It turned out the ministor of foreign affair and trade whose daughter received undue favor on copetition for a high ranking public servant. >> It turned out that the daughter of the minister of foreign affair and trade received an undue favor on competition for a high ranking public servant. It is so unfair since it removed the opportunities from the peopl who are preparing for the position for a long time. >> It is so unfair to others who are preparing for the position for a long time. Meanwhile, There have been many scandals related to misused power such as receiving bribe, finding a loophole to avoid paying taxes, and breaking the law. >> Meanwhile, there have been many scandals related to the misused power such as receiving bribes, finding a loophole to avoid paying taxes, and breaking the laws. That's why Korean society now is having a hard time to be integreted. >> That's why Korean society now is having a hard time to be integrated. The public don't believe high ranking people at society so that they don't want to follow those people. >> As a result, the public doesn't follow and obey them since they think they aren’t worth trusting for. The public should be more aware of what they are doing and apply strict stardard about integrity for them. >> Hence, the public should be more aware of what they are doing and apply strict standards in integrity them.    

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