Unhygienic restaurants in Busan: How to deal with them?
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The news article I read today was about 25 restaurants in Busan exposed upon inspection and caught breaching sanitary regulations. They were found using rags covered in rats excrement and trash buckets to defrost seafood as well as long expired ingredients. Above all, the striking piece of information was that these problematic restaurants are not some lousy ones that nobody knows, but most of them were spotlighted on TV as delicious and must-go eateries for locals and tourists. The breach of the Food Sanitation Act, therefore, is an issue needed to be promptly addressed in order to restore the compromised image of local restaurants in Busan. The best way is to give a court order to shut down the restaurants for a while, requiring them to meet sanitary regulations during the period and facing an inspection that will decide whether to allow the reopening of their business. Even after the reopening, the regular inspection is needed to be followed to maintain the hygienic conditions.
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They were found using rags covered in rats excrement and trash buckets to defrost seafood as well as long expired ingredients.
>>They found used rags covered with rats excrement and trash buckets they use to defrost seafood as well as long expired ingredients.
Above all, the striking piece of information was that these problematic restaurants are not some lousy ones that nobody knows, but most of them were spotlighted on TV as delicious and must-go eateries for locals and tourists.
>>correct
The breach of the Food Sanitation Act, therefore, is an issue needed to be promptly addressed in order to restore the compromised image of local restaurants in Busan.
>>correct
The best way is to give a court order to shut down the restaurants for a while, requiring them to meet sanitary regulations during the period and facing an inspection that will decide whether to allow the reopening of their business.
>>correct
Even after the reopening, the regular inspection is needed to be followed to maintain the hygienic conditions.
>>Even after the reopening, the inspection should be done regularly to maintain the hygienic conditions.
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