Union rally

2016-06-13 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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There is a possibility that Our intention will be ignored. I already received the offer from head office located in Jin Ju city to work in the department of international cooperation . I mentioned the exit strategy in the morning. When we join the battle, we have to prepare the withdrawal route. If we always win the battle, it would be the best situation. But we always need to prepare the worst sinario. I thing that there is little possibility that the new appointed CEO for the merged agency will resign. And there were not any precedent of the cancelation of the new appointed CEO by government as well. I said that we would better pursue practical interest than sink all together. It is time to request our terms desired such as the raise ,fair personal appointment and the promotion condition. The opinion was divided into two side. The other side insisted that we have to fight until the new CEO will resign. In conclusion, we made a decision that we are going to decide this matter by vote.

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Good afternoon, Mr. [Name]. ^^ How\'s your day going so far? Not too busy, I hope. Thank you very much sharing this. I know this matter is starting to stress you out or maybe it\'s starting to take its toll on you. I could imagine how difficult it must be for all of you to deal with such adversities. I understand why some of the employees in your company insist that you fight until the end. But in my opinion, it is much wiser to discuss your terms with the current CEO and talk things out so everybody would turn out as a winner. This is the best escape route in my point-of-view. If they agree to all of your terms, you\'ll end up with a raise, be designated to the department that you want to be assigned to and get a good and fair promotion process. On the other hand, if most of your colleagues would insist on fighting, they may end up with the same pay, a bad position, unfair promotion process or worse losing their jobs. I am not saying that you should give in. What I\'m saying is, you should know when to fight and when to come to terms. You should know how to play your cards right otherwise, you\'ll all end up as losers. I agree to your opinion and I think your other colleagues should seriously consider and think about it. I hope you\'re okay. Stay strong and happy. I\'ll see you again tomorrow. Take care always. ~Teacher Charry ^^ There is a possibility that Our intention will be ignored. >> There is a possibility that our intention will be ignored. I already received the offer from head office located in Jin Ju city to work in the department of international cooperation .>> I already received the offer from the head office located in Jin Ju city to work in the Department of International Cooperation.I mentioned the exit strategy in the morning. >> CORRECT! OR >> I told them about the exit strategy in the morning. When we join the battle, we have to prepare the withdrawal route. >> CORRECT! OR >> When we join the battle, we have to make sure that there\'s a withdrawal route for us.If we always win the battle, it would be the best situation. >> CORRECT! OR >> If we always win every battle, it would be a great situation. But we always need to prepare the worst sinario. >> But we always need to prepare for the worst scenario.I thing that there is little possibility that the new appointed CEO for the merged agency will resign. >> I think that there is little possibility that the new appointed CEO for the merged agency will resign.And there were not any precedent of the cancelation of the new appointed CEO by government as well. >> And there is not any precedent of the cancelation of the new appointed CEO by government as well. I said that we would better pursue practical interest than sink all together. >> I said that, we would better pursue practical interests, than sink altogether. OR >> I told them that it\'s better for us to pursue our best individual interests rather than sink altogether. It is time to request our terms desired such as the raise ,fair personal appointment and the promotion condition.>> It is time to request our desired terms such as the raise, fair personal appointment and the promotion condition.The opinion was divided into two side.>> The opinions were divided into two sides.The other side insisted that we have to fight until the new CEO will resign. >> CORRECT! OR >> The other side stood it\'s ground and insisted that we fight until the new CEO resigns.In conclusion, we made a decision that we are going to decide this matter by vote. >> In conclusion, we made a decision that we are going to decide on this matter through votation.

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