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2015-02-26 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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got aroundlook aroundturned arounddrove awaygo awaypassed awayran awaythrow away <Story Time> Jack,Lue,Andy is play in the playground.But they don't went home.Jack's mother and Andy's mother is worried about them.So,they decided to find them.They got around the playground.They shouted their son name,so they look around.Finally they can seek their mother and went home.When Jack going to his home he saw his friend but his friend turn around.After they went home,the cellphone his uncle got his car and drove away to go to his home.His mom said "Don't go away Jack like you."but his uncle finally,leave."Mom do you know why my aunt pass away?"asked Jack."She passed away because she was sick."answered his mom.They watched the news.According to the news the theif stole some food and ran away. Jack throw away marker in the garbage."Don't throw it."his mother said.

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Hi there [이름]! What\'s up?^^ I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for doing your best to come up with this story. I\'m  very proud of you.Your imagination is really good. Keep it up!   If you have time, kindly review the corrections I made below. Take care and see you in class. Teacher Liza^^   got aroundlook aroundturned arounddrove awaygo awaypassed awayran awaythrow away<Story Time> Jack,Lue,Andy is play in the playground. >>Jack, Lue, and Andy is playing in the playground. But they don\'t went home. >>So, they did not go home. Jack\'s mother and Andy\'s mother is worried about them. >>Correct! OR>>Jack and Andy\'s mother is very worried about them. So,they decided to find them. >>So, they decided to look for them. They got around the playground. >>They went to the playground. They shouted their son name,so they look around. >>They shouted their son\'s name while looking around. Finally they can seek their mother and went home. >>Finally, they heard their mother and they went home. When Jack going to his home he saw his friend but his friend turn around. >>When Jack was going home, he saw his friend but his friend turn around. After they went home,the cellphone his uncle got his car and drove away to go to his home. >>When they arrive home, the cellphone rang so his uncle went to his car and drove away to go home. His mom said \"Don\'t go away Jack like you.\"but his uncle finally,leave. >>His mom said, \"Don\'t go away,Jack likes you\" but his uncle already left. \"Mom do you know why my aunt pass away?\"asked Jack. >>Correct! OR>> \"Mom, do you know why my aunt died?\" asked Jack. \"She passed away because she was sick.\"answered his mom. >>Correct! They watched the news. >>Correct! According to the news the theif stole some food and ran away. >> According to the news, a thief stole some food and ran away afterwards.Jack throw away marker in the garbage. >>Jack threw the marker in the garbage can. \"Don\'t throw it.\"his mother said. >>Correct!  

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