Use your imagination. How will people communicate in the future?

2016-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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In ancient times, people had to walk a long distance like a few hours or several days in some cases to convey a message or to meet others. The way of communication has changed thanks to advanced technologies. We used to depend on postal mails not long time ago until telephone was developed. And then, the mobile phone has been developed and emerged as a new means of communication. The mobile phone brought us a new world in which we can communicate with each other regardless of when it is or where we are. Now we can’t think of our life without the cell phone. In the past when there was no the mobile phone, there was no way we can reach out to someone who was on the move. It was a great revolution, although it has some negative aspects such as preventing people from seeking tranquility. How will people communicate in the future? This need for fast, flexible and diverse communication methods is likely to drive further changes in the future.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Sir [이름]!

Happy Sunday! Hihihi. ^^

I hope that you had enough rest this weekend.

Thanks for your composition.

Looking foward to hear a lot of stories in class.

Talk to you very soon.

Teacher Nina


In ancient times, people had to walk a long distance like a few hours or several days in some cases to convey a message or to meet others.

>> correct

The way of communication has changed thanks to advanced technologies.

>> correct

We used to depend on postal mails not long time ago until telephone was developed.

>> correct

And then, the mobile phone has been developed and emerged as a new means of communication.

>> correct

The mobile phone brought us a new world in which we can communicate with each other regardless of when it is or where we are.

>> correct

Now we can’t think of our life without the cell phone.

>> correct 

In the past when there was no the mobile phone, there was no way we can reach out to someone who was on the move.

>> In the past when there was no mobile phone, there was no way we can reach out to someone who was on the move.

It was a great revolution, although it has some negative aspects such as preventing people from seeking tranquility.

>> correct 

How will people communicate in the future?

>> correct 

This need for fast, flexible and diverse communication methods is likely to drive further changes in the future.

>> correct 

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