Using a heater or an air conditioner for 24 hours?
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A nice start of the week Sir [이름]!
I really love reading your essays. ^^ It is nice that you were able to give the advantage and disadvantages heaters/ air conditioners. ^^ You deserve a round of applause for being a person who is determined to improve his skills. Keep it up!
Just keep on writing and sharing your ideas in class. I\'m excited hear to your ideas in class. ^^ See you!
Teacher Nina
Who in the world could live without an air conditioner or a heater?
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In hot and humid climates, the air conditioning is more than a modern comfort.
>> Did you mean: In hot and humid places, the air conditioner is more than a modern comfort.
It is an essential element in getting through those sweltering and sticky days.
>> Correct!
Heating is also a very important tool that keeps us warm.
>> Heater is also a very important tool that keeps us warm.
However, the problems associated with air conditioners or heaters arise out of overuse.
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It consumes energy and costs us a lot of money.
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More importantly, it can adversely affect a person\'s health.
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The people exposed to air conditioning are more susceptible to colds, flu and other minor ailments.
>> The people exposed to air conditioner are more susceptible to colds, flu and other minor ailments.
It is also apparent that those who spend an inordinate amount of time in an air conditioned environment are not able to readily cope with hot summer temperatures.
>> It is also apparent that those who spend an inordinate amount of time in an air conditioned environment are not able to readily cope with temperature.
>> OR: It is also apparent that those who spend an inordinate amount of time in an air conditioned environment are not able to readily cope with summer season.
In addition to this many people have been made sick by extreme variances between outside and inside temperatures.
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We need cut back on air conditioning and heating as a way to conserve energy and to avoid detriments of over-usign them.
>> Correct! ( Spelling check: using ^^ )
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