Using Cell phone
학생이 쓴 원문
I use my mobile phone from getting up to going to sleep. Especially when I got a break time, my cell phone turned to a small theater with Netflix for me. So I can enjoy a lot of movies and drama with comfortable posture like lying in the bed. I know there are many side-effects if I spend lots of time to using cell phone. But I couldn\'t help but using cell phone when I\'m in a rest. I might be addicted by using cell phone.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
You are in a similar situation as everyone else.
You explained your side really well.
Please be careful of the use of prepositions.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I use my mobile phone from getting up to going to sleep.
>> Correct
Especially when I got a break time, my cell phone turned to a small theater with Netflix for me.
>> This is especially true when I have break time, my cell phone turns into a small theater because I watch Netflix.
So I can enjoy a lot of movies and drama with comfortable posture like lying in the bed.
>> That\'s why I can enjoy a lot of movies and TV shows in a comfortable position like lying on my bed.
I know there are many side-effects if I spend lots of time to using cell phone.
>> I know there are many side effects if I spend lots of time using my cell phone.
But I couldn\'t help but using cell phone when I\'m in a rest.
>> However, I can\'t help but use my cell phone while I\'m resting.
I might be addicted by using cell phone.
>> I might be addicted to the use of my cell phone.
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