V11 KIA Win
학생이 쓴 원문
Eventually,KIA win the game.So KIA tigers achieve V11.Yesterday KIA Tigers win the Dusan Bears at 7-6.KIA Tigers lose the game one time and win the four games in a row.Yesterday Leee BUM Ho hitted grandslam.And pitcher Yang Hyeun Jong saved KIA Tigers.The Korean Series MVP is went to Yang Hyeon Jong.KIA Tigers won after 7years.Every people looked happy.KIA Tigers players and coach was really happy.Next year KIA will have a match with 1000000fans.
강사 첨삭
Eventually,KIA win the game.So KIA tigers achieve V11.Yesterday KIA Tigers win the Dusan Bears at 7-6.KIA Tigers lose the game one time and win the four games in a row.Yesterday Leee BUM Ho hitted grandslam.And pitcher Yang Hyeun Jong saved KIA Tigers.The Korean Series MVP is went to Yang Hyeon Jong.KIA Tigers won after 7years.Every people looked happy.KIA Tigers players and coach was really happy.Next year KIA will have a match with 1000000fans.
Eventually, KIA won the game. So KIA tigers achieved V11. Yesterday, KIA Tigers won against the Doosan Bears with the scores of 7-6. KIA Tigers lost the game one time yet won four games in a row. Yesterday, Lee Bum Ho was able to hit a grand slam and their pitcher, Yang Hyeun Jong, saved the KIA Tigers. The Korean Series MVP was awarded to Yang Hyeon Jong. KIA Tigers was able to win after 7 years. Everyone was very happy about it. The KIA Tiger players and their coach were really happy about their victory as well. Next year, KIA will have a match with 1000000 fans watching.
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