valuable day
학생이 쓴 원문
Yesterday I went lecture meeting of a monk who is very famous in korea.
His speech gives courage and wish to someone who are distressed and confused in life. I often listen his lecture on website when I feel depressed. It makes me happy and think positively. It was very honor to listen his speech under my eyes.
He chose the message written something worries in a box and shared the trouble together and gave some advice and let us know how to solve that problom wisely.
It was valuable day~!
If I have a chance i will go there with my husband again.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
I am sure that you enjoyed listening to inspirational messages.
True enough, they are inspiring.
They even give us great hope.
Anyway, just be inspired.
I am going to call you again later.
~Teacher Chloe
Yesterday I went lecture meeting of a monk who is very famous in korea.
>>Yesterday, I had a lecture meeting with a very famous monk in South Korea. His speech gives courage and wish to someone who are distressed and confused in life.
>>His speech gives courage and hope to people who are distressed and confused in life.
I often listen his lecture on website when I feel depressed.
>>I often listen to his lecture on a website when I feel depressed.
It makes me happy and think positively.
>>Correct!
It was very honor to listen his speech under my eyes.
>>It was an honor and priveledge to listen to his speech with my naked eyes. He chose the message written something worries in a box and shared the trouble together and gave some advice and let us know how to solve that problom wisely.
>>He chose messages that are written in pieces of paper from a box. He shared them and gave some some advice on how to solve problems wisely. It was valuable day~!
>>It was a memorable day!If I have a chance i will go there with my husband again.
>>If I will have a chance, I will go there again with my husband.
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