Vaness

2011-06-23 · 첨삭 강사 Bella

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Welcome(대한항공 출발 안내 방송) Good morning (afternoon, evening), ladies and gentlemen. On behalf of Captain OOO and the entire crew, Welcome aboard Korean Air flight OOO bound for OOO. It is a pleasure to have you with us. Our flight time to OOO will be OOO minutes after take-off. Please make sure that your seat belt is securely fastened And refrain from smoking during the entire flight. Also, the use of potable electronic devices is not allowed take- off and landing. If there is anything we can do to make your flight more comfortable, Our cabin attendants are happy to assist you. Please enjoy the flight. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

Good construction of sentences.Keep it up.

-T.Vaness-

Welcome

>>Welcome!

 Good morning (afternoon, evening), ladies and gentlemen.

>>Correct

 On behalf of Captain OOO and the entire crew,  Welcome aboard Korean Air flight OOO bound for OOO.

>> In behalf of Captain OOO and the entire crew,  welcome aboard Korean Air flight OOO bound for OOO.

 It is a pleasure to have you with us.

>>Correct

 Our flight time to OOO will be OOO minutes after take-off.

>>Correct

 Please make sure that your seat belt is securely fastened

>> Please make sure that your seat belt is securely fastened.

 And refrain from smoking during the entire flight.

>> Refrain from smoking during the entire flight.

Also, the use of potable electronic devices is not allowed take- off and landing.

>> Also, the use of portable electronic devices is not allowed during take- off and landing.

 If there is anything we can do to make your flight more comfortable, Our cabin attendants are happy to assist you.

>>Correct

 Please enjoy the flight.

>>Correct

 Thank you.

>>Correct

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