vested rights
학생이 쓴 원문
They keep very strong power and vested rights in aged politician in Korea.
Their power become cartel and a solid wall.
It is a difficult that young politician alive among them.
Unfortunately people are used to older politician and feel familiar owing to wrong Confucianism.
The other thing is that we have never seen a young and honest politician in Korea.
강사 첨삭
Hi Ms. [이름]!
Contrary to what Korea believes, in the Philippines, we give young leaders a chance as long as they have proven their worth in politics from a young age. Did you know that each community has its own Youth Chairman? Starting as early as 18 years old, individuals can begin their political careers by leading the youth, and from there, they can gradually become community leaders. This is how our political system works. However, there are also celebrities who jump straight into higher positions but fail to succeed due to a lack of experience.
Talk to you later.
Aki~
They keep very strong power and vested rights in aged politicians in Korea.
>>> CORRECT!
Their power become cartel and a solid wall.
>>> Their power becomes a cartel and a solid wall.
It is a difficult that young politician alive among them.
>>> It is difficult for young politicians to stay alive among them.
Unfortunately people are used to older politician and feel familiar owing to wrong Confucianism.
>>> Unfortunately people are used to older politicians and feel familiar owing to wrong Confucianism.
The other thing is that we have never seen a young and honest politician in Korea.
>>> CORRECT!
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