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2023-07-04 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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Sexual crimes are happened by assailant, so we should blame and punish not victims regardless of gender. But I think it might be dangerous that some women try to tempt using sexual attraction and exposed clothing. I have ever seen several times who are drucken women in the street at night with exposed clothing. I was worried about her safty. Anyway we should respect others\' human right regardless of gender.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Ms. [이름]!
Yes, a person won\'t be harming others if it is not his nature regardless of the people around him. It is similar to a married person even if there are temptations around him/her, that person won\'t be bothered unless he/she is willing to commit a mistake. Temptation is always there. it is just how a person handles it.
Se you!
Aki~

Sexual crimes are happened by assailant, so we should blame and punish not victims regardless of gender.
>>> Sexual crimes are done by assailants, so we should blame and punish not the victims regardless of gender.

But I think it might be dangerous that some women try to tempt using sexual attraction and exposed clothing.
>>> But I think it might be dangerous that some women try to tempt others using sexual attraction and exposed clothing.

I have ever seen several times who are drucken women in the street at night with exposed clothing.
>>>  I have ever seen several times drunken women on the street at night with exposed clothing.

I was worried about her safety.
>>> CORRECT!

Anyway, we should respect others\' human rights regardless of gender.
>>> CORRECT!

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