Violation of the principles. Why abortion is illegal?

2018-04-13 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Before i get started, I am going to define the term called 'human being'. I guess human being definitely includes the concepts of humanity. And when it comes to humanity, it contains sense, perception from outside, emotions, desires, expectation for better life and rational thinking... etc. So could we dare to say that Fetus has no trait to be a human being? Fetus is under the particular circumstance that it cannot control its body. And its life is totally up to its mother. It is a just tiny creature. But it develops its sense gradually. I found the article related to fetus. In this article, fetus is able to perceive the sense of touch at 3 week gestation; evidence of humanity. It clearly developed its perceptional capacity with nutrition. And when it(he) go out from the mother's womb, he might get a enormous potential for successful life. He can bloom his humanity. How dare to say to go for abortion? Glenda, i will go to recruit about 2018 Inter-Korean summit on Friday.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^

Good evening! 


I hope you will enjoy the summit. 

Go over some corrections and suggestions I made on your essay.

See you! ^^


Have a blast this weekend. :)


T. Glenda 


Before i get started, I am going to define the term called \'human being\'.

>> Before I get started, I am going to define the term \'human being\'.

I guess human being definitely includes the concepts of humanity.

>> Correct

or

>> Human being definitely includes the concepts of humanity.

And when it comes to humanity, it contains sense, perception from outside, emotions, desires, expectation for better life and rational thinking... etc.

>> Correct

 So could we dare to say that Fetus has no trait to be a human being?

>> Correct

Fetus is under the particular circumstance that it cannot control its body. And its life is totally up to its mother.

>> Correct

or

>> Fetus is under the particular circumstance that it cannot control its body, and its life totally depends on its mother.

It is a just tiny creature. But it develops its sense gradually.

>> It is just a tiny creature, but it develops its senses gradually.

I found the article related to fetus.

>> I found an article related to fetus.

In this article, fetus is able to perceive the sense of touch at 3 week gestation; evidence of humanity.

>> In this article, fetus can perceive the sense of touch at 3 week gestation; an evidence of humanity.

It clearly developed its perceptional capacity with nutrition.

>> Correct

And when it(he) go out from the mother\'s womb, he might get a enormous potential for successful life.

>> And when it(he) goes out from the mother\'s womb, it (he) might get an enormous potential for successful life.

He can bloom his humanity.
>> He can thrive as human being.
How dare to say to go for abortion?
>> How dare we say go for abortion?
Glenda, i will go to recruit about 2018 Inter-Korean summit on Friday.

>> I will go to the 2018 Inter-Korean Summit on Friday.


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