VIP
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With this situation, only the rich become the member of VIP Group.
At last, we can enjoy the VIP privilege with buying expensive ticket .
Nothing more, nothing less.
The VIP is not mean cultured and elderly people only respect their purchasing power in Korea.
The company or business market can make more money by developing the system of VIP.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for expressing your thoughts well. The VIP treatment shows another gap between the rich and the poor.
Altough anyone can be a VIP in their own way, it\'s just how we interpret it.
Altough anyone can be a VIP in their own way, it\'s just how we interpret it.
Enjoy the day!
Aki~
Nothing more, nothing less.
With this situation, only the rich become the member of VIP Group.
>>> In this situation, only the wealthy can become members of the VIP group.
At last, we can enjoy the VIP privilege with buying expensive ticket .
>>> Finally, we can enjoy VIP privileges by purchasing expensive tickets.
At last, we can enjoy the VIP privilege with buying expensive ticket .
>>> Finally, we can enjoy VIP privileges by purchasing expensive tickets.
Nothing more, nothing less.
>> CORRECT!
The VIP is not mean cultured and elderly people only respect their purchasing power in Korea.
The VIP is not mean cultured and elderly people only respect their purchasing power in Korea.
>>> In Korea, being a VIP doesn’t necessarily mean cultured or elderly people; it’s more about the respect for their purchasing power.
The company or business market can make more money by developing the system of VIP.
The company or business market can make more money by developing the system of VIP.
>>> Companies and businesses can generate more revenue by developing VIP systems.
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