visiting museums to learn about a country.

2021-01-25 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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Many people believe that visiting museums can help them to learn about a country when they travel other country. However, I disagree with this idea for two reasons. First of all, museums are too costly, usually the costs are around 20 dollars. For example, when I traveled New York city in the U.S, visited several famous museums including Modern Art Museum, it costs almost 100 dollars. had not visited that museums, I could have stayed better hotel . Secondly, I can\'t mingle with local people. Although we can lean some historical culture from museum, we can\'t interact with local people while we are visiting a museum. For my experience, I prefer lean culture interacting with local residents. That is how I am. In this regard, people don\'t have to visit museums to learn about culture of a country they travel.

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Hi May,
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Teacher ELLY.
visiting museums to learn about a country.
>>Visiting museums in order to learn about a country.
Many people believe that visiting museums can help them to learn about a country when they travel other country.
>>Many people believe that visiting museums can help them to learn about a country when they travel to that place.
However, I disagree with this idea for two reasons. 
CORRECT!
or>>But, I am in disagreement with this particular idea because of two things. 
First of all, museums are too costly, usually the costs are around 20 dollars. 
>>First of all, museums are too costly. Usually the cost is often around 20 dollars. 
For example, when I traveled New York city in the U.S, visited several famous museums including Modern Art Museum, it costs almost 100 dollars. 
>>For example, when I traveled to New York city in the U.S, I visited several famous museums including the Modern Art Museum, which costs almost 100 dollars. 
had not visited that museums, I could have stayed better hotel . 
>>Had I not visited those museums, I could have stayed in a much better hotel. 
Secondly, I can\'t mingle with local people. 
>>Secondly, I can\'t mingle with the local people. 
Although we can lean some historical culture from museum, we can\'t interact with local people while we are visiting a museum. 
>>Although, we can lean some historical cultures from the museums, we can\'t interact with the local people while we are visiting them. 
For my experience, I prefer lean culture interacting with local residents. 
>>For my own experience, I prefer to learn the culture by interacting with the local residents. 
That is how I am. 
CORRECT!
>>This is my nature.
In this regard, people don\'t have to visit museums to learn about culture of a country they travel.
>>In this regard, people don\'t have to visit museums in order to learn about the culture of a country they are traveling.

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