Voice, music

2022-02-15 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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My voice:) I love my voice. Sing is my life and music is root of my heart. If my voice change other voice, maybe I don\'t want to keep living. Music is my everything and I relized I really really love music, singing and my voice

강사 첨삭

Hi Ann:)

Wow, that was very poetic. You indeed have a very beautiful voice based on all the videos that I have watched. Keep it up!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My voice:) I love my voice.
> The thing that I love the most is my voice. 

Sing is my life and music is root of my heart.
>> Singing is my life and music is the root of my heart. 

If my voice change other voice, maybe I don\'t want to keep living.
>> If my voice change to another voice, maybe I don\'t want to keep living.

Music is my everything and I relized I really really love music, singing and my voice
>>Music is my everything and I realized that I really love music and singing. 

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