Volkswagen

2016-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I have already heard the new that we are going to talk about. When I read this article, I was surprised about the famed automobile brand name Volkswagen. Trust about Volkswagen in Korea is very deep. The Volkswagen is famous for good quality and durability. So, The Volkswagen owners are proud about their car's quality. And more German country's image has confirmed Honesty and Clean. Most of people who are interested with Cars disappointed about their irregularities. Imported car owners are regarded as a person who are situated at high social position. So, many people who want to show off their wealth drives imported car. My car is not that good car. I bought my car 9 years ago. If I have to choose a certain car, I would like to choose a domestic car. The price of automobile insurance is more expensive than the domestic one.

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Hi, Mr. [Name]! ^^ How\'s your day so far? I hope it\'s not too stressful. Thank you for once again posting something on our composition board. I enjoyed reading your opinions about it. In addition to that, your senteces are really nice today so good job! ^^ I honestly think money is a powerful tool. It can make people do a lot of things or it can do a lot of things to people. If the people who have it or are aiming for it don\'t learn how to control it, then they are doomed. I think that\'s exactly what happened to the people who are working at Volkswagen and the people who manipulated the documents. They wanted to acquire money so much that they\'re willing to turn a blind eye. I remember a friend of mine who once told me that if you\'re going to do something bad or nasty, make sure that no one discovers about it. Otherwise you\'ll get into a big trouble and it would be really difficult to get out of it. I think that\'s what\'s happening to Volkswagen now. They did a dishonest thing and they\'re now facing a big trouble because somebody discovered it. I\'ll see you again on Monday. ^^ Enjoy your weekend. ~Teacher Charry :) I have already heard the new that we are going to talk about. >> I have already heard the news that we are going to talk about. OR >> I\'ve already heard of the news that we are suppose to talk about today.When I read this article, I was surprised about the famed automobile brand name Volkswagen. >> CORRECT! OR >> I was surprised when I read the article about the famous automobile brand called Volkswagen. Trust about Volkswagen in Korea is very deep. >> CORRECT! OR >> The good reputation of Volkwagen is well-known in Korea. The Volkswagen is famous for good quality and durability.>> CORRECT! OR >> The car brand Volkswagen is well-known because of its good quality and durability.So, The Volkswagen owners are proud about their car\'s quality. >> So, the Volkswagen owners are proud about their car\'s quality.And more German country\'s image has confirmed Honesty and Clean.>> [DO YOU MEAN]: In addition to that, Germany\'s image when it comes to honesty and cleanliness has been confirmed. Most of people who are interested with Cars disappointed about their irregularities.>> Most people who are interested with cars got disappointed about their irregularities.Imported car owners are regarded as a person who are situated at high social position. >> Imported car owners are regarded as people who are situated in a high social position. OR >> People who own imported cars are regarded as people who are in a high social position.So, many people who want to show off their wealth drives imported car. >> So, many people who want to show off their wealth drive an imported car. OR >> So, many people who want to show off their wealth drive imported cars.My car is not that good car. >> My car is not that good. OR >> My car is not a good car. I bought my car 9 years ago. >> CORRECT! OR >> I purchased my car 9 years ago. If I have to choose a certain car, I would like to choose a domestic car. >> CORRECT! OR >> If I have to choose a car, I would choose a domestic one.The price of automobile insurance is more expensive than the domestic one. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: The price of automobile insurance is more expensive for an imported car than the domestic one.

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