Voter turnout is generally low. How could more people be persuaded to vote?

2016-05-17 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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There is no society or a country that is perfect. Every government and society has flaws, although the severity is different. We, as a member of society, all take ourselves accountable to some extent for any social and political problems. Many young generation, compared to old generation, don’t go to the voting polls while making more complaints about social issues such as wealth inequality, gender discrimination, improper education system, and criticizing corrupted government officials and politicians. Our society and politics won’t change at all if we simply give up our right to vote. In a modern and democratized society, voting seems to be the best way to have our voices heard, although we cannot simply change all the problems by exercising our suffrage. Nothing could change even if we vote. We all hate politics. However, if we don’t vote due to the disillusion toward politics, we will only make politicians happy because it will lead them to do whatever they want to.

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Happy Tuesday, Sir [이름]! What a perfect composition.Yes, we should vote in order to know if there will be a change in the government if a new politician will be elected. In our country, I can say that I can see changes as early as now. The presumptive president, Mayor Rodrigo Duterte implented the curfew and it will be at 10 p.m. There were minors that were already caught and the government officials in each district already talked to the parents. I guess there will be a lot of things that will change these coming days and months. Thanks for the composition. Enjoy the rest of the day.Teacher Nina   There is no society or a country that is perfect. >> correct Every government and society has flaws, although the severity is different. >> correct We, as a member of society, all take ourselves accountable to some extent for any social and political problems. >> correct Many young generation, compared to old generation, don’t go to the voting polls while making more complaints about social issues such as wealth inequality, gender discrimination, improper education system, and criticizing corrupted government officials and politicians. >> correct Our society and politics won’t change at all if we simply give up our right to vote. >> correct In a modern and democratized society, voting seems to be the best way to have our voices heard, although we cannot simply change all the problems by exercising our suffrage. >> correct Nothing could change even if we vote. >> correct We all hate politics. >> correct However, if we don’t vote due to the disillusion toward politics, we will only make politicians happy because it will lead them to do whatever they want to. >> correct

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