Walking with family is the most important, and best out door activity
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In my opinion, walking with my family is the most important, and best outdoor activity. I will cite two reasons why it is.
First, we can be more friendly and solving the problem by talking with family. Walking is one of the best way to do this. We can talk with our families when we are talking.
Second, we can exercise, too. Running is more effective to exercise, but exercising with family can be very good experience. We can make it to memories. After we can\'t see our parents or families, it would be good memories.
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In my opinion, walking with my family is the most important, and best outdoor activity.
>> In my opinion, walking with my family is the most important and best outdoor activity.
I will cite two reasons why it is.
>> I will cite two reasons.
First, we can be more friendly and solving the problem by talking with family.
>> First, I can be closer and solve more problems by talking with my family.
Walking is one of the best way to do this.
>> Walking is one of the best ways to do this.
We can talk with our families when we are talking.
>> We can talk with our families while we are walking.
Second, we can exercise, too.
>> This is a good sentence.
Running is more effective to exercise, but exercising with family can be very good experience.
>> Running is more effective than walking, but exercising with my family can be a very good experience.
We can make it to memories.
>> It can be memorable.
After we can\'t see our parents or families, it would be good memories.
>> It can make us remember our parents and other family members when they\'re gone.
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