Watching movies
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when I was young, I could watch movies only in theater. However as technology getting more developed, I can enjoy watching movies with my hands with Netflix. I can enjoy all of the movies which was provided by Netflix even if they are closed in a theater. it has some weakness because there are lots of movies I can watch so It\'s difficult to choose. As long as I find movies or drama to watch, I feel excited and enjoy watching until end of the story.
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Hi John!
I liked your sentences today.
They are clear and you thought about them with good efforts.
Keep it up!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
when I was young, I could watch movies only in theater.
>> When I was young, I watched movies only at the theater.
However as technology getting more developed, I can enjoy watching movies with my hands with Netflix.
>> However as technology developed, I can enjoy watching movies on my own through Netflix.
I can enjoy all of the movies which was provided by Netflix even if they are closed in a theater.
>> I can enjoy all of the movies featured on Netflix even if the theaters are close.
it has some weakness because there are lots of movies I can watch so It\'s difficult to choose.
>> There are some disadvantages but there are also a lot of movies that I can watch so it\'s sometimes difficult to choose.
As long as I find movies or drama to watch, I feel excited and enjoy watching until end of the story.
>> As long as I find movies or shows to watch, I would feel excited and I would enjoy watching until the end of the story.
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