water
학생이 쓴 원문
Water shortage will affect korea badly in the near future.
So we must prepare for that.
Most of korean don't know korea lacks water.
It was selected as the country that lacks water by UN a couple of years ago.
It can be serious problem to our society because we can't live without water.
We still need some solutions to solve water shortage matters.
It has to start from persons.
Use a cup , when brushing your teeth.
Do not keep the water turn on , when taking a shower.
Now It is time to think about environment to survive.
강사 첨삭
Hello there my dear [이름],
Thank you so much for this very helpful composition. I think that everyone should be aware of this. Let's talk more about it in the class.
-T.Camille-
Water shortage will affect Korea badly in the near future.
>>CorrectSo we must prepare for that.
>>CorrectMost of korean don't know korea lacks water.
>>Most Koreans don't know we have water shortage.It was selected as the country that lacks water by UN a couple of years ago.
>>CorrectIt can be serious problem to our society because we can't live without water.
>>It can be a serious problem to our society because we can't live without water.We still need some solutions to solve water shortage matters.
>>CorrectIt has to start from persons.
>>It has to start from each person.Use a cup , when brushing your teeth.
>>CorrectDo not keep the water turn on , when taking a shower.
>>CorrectDo not keep the water running when you are taking a shower.Now It is time to think about environment to survive.
>>Now, it is time to think about environment to survive.
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