Water is vital to living things
학생이 쓴 원문
Water is the most important resources for living things. It\'s because living things always have to drink water. It means water is vital to live. If people don\'t drink water three days in a row, then they die. It applies all of living things. Like oxygen, water is also vital resources for living things, so considering water that is vital is rightful.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Daniel! You were
able to use good expressions in your work. Very good! Just please remember
to use pronouns to replace nouns in your sentences.
- Teacher Debbie
>> Water is the most important resource for living things.
It\'s because living things always have to drink water.
>> It\'s because living things always need water.
It means water is vital to live.
>> This is a good sentence.
If people don\'t drink water three days in a row, then they die.
>> If people don\'t drink water three days in a row, they will die.
It applies all of living things.
>> It applies to all living things.
Like oxygen, water is also vital resources for living things, so considering water that is vital is rightful.
>> Like oxygen, water is also vital for living things, so we must conserve it.
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