Water park

Welcome to Water Park! The midsummer heat is coming. So, we decided that our meeting-"Together for Maltese" will host in "Water Park For Dog". In there, there is playground with water, beverage bar and snack bar and so on. We can play water activities with puppies and during our break time, we will talk many things what we could not afford because our meeting not often broke it up. Also, we will plan to drink a beverage and eat snacks free of charge. And at dinner time, we can eat many Korean food and your puppy also will eat special meal. Pack your extra clothes when you can wear during the water activities-short pants, T-shirts and sandals. Enjoy this party with your cute puppy. Puppy is free and a season pass fee is 20$ per person(You will be offered snack, beverage and dinner.).

Hi Jhee, nice hearing your voice on a monday. And thank you once again for sending me this letter. Here are some possible revisions onyour sentences.    Welcome to Water Park! >>CorrectThe midsummer heat is coming. >>Summer heat is just around the corner. So, we decided that our meeting- >>so we decided to have our meeting. "Together for Maltese" will host in "Water Park For Dog". >>Correct!!  In there, there is playground with water, beverage bar and snack bar and so on. >>At Water Park there is a water playground, a beverage bar, a snack bar and so on.  We can play water activities with puppies and during our break time, we will talk many things what we could not afford because our meeting not often broke it up. >>We can play in the water with the puppies. >>During our break time,we can talk about many things that we can't afford to do because the meeting cut out  our plans  Also, we will plan to drink a beverage and eat snacks free of charge. >>We also plan to drink and have snacks for free.  And at dinner time, we can eat many Korean food and your puppy also will eat special meal. >>At dinner time, we can eat as many korean food as we can and that includes our puppy's special meal.   Pack your extra clothes when you can wear during the water activities-short pants, T-shirts and sandals. >>So pack your summer outfits-short pants, t-shirts and sandals.  Enjoy this party with your cute puppy. >>Enjoy the party wih your cute puppy.Puppy is free and a season pass fee is 20$ per person(You will be offered snack, beverage and dinner.) >>The entrance fee of your puppy is free and you get a season pass for $20 per pax inclusive of snack, beverage and dinner