Water saving
학생이 쓴 원문
Many years ago, We learned that our country is a lack-of-water-country. When I was in kindergarten, I used to make a poster or sing about how to reduce using water. you would get awards if you\'re good at making these. I\'m not sure these activities actually would have helped others to save water but as much as me, I had thought how I spent water in water-needed situation such as in a shower, washing hands while doing these activities.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
I hope that the new terms I introduced in the corrections would help you out.
These are most commonly used.
It would make the expression of your thoughts more organized.
Use them wisely.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Many years ago, We learned that our country is a lack-of-water-country.
>> Many years ago, we learned that there was water shortage in our country.
When I was in kindergarten, I used to make a poster or sing about how to reduce using water.
>> When I was in kindergarten, I used to make a poster or sing about how to use water wisely.
you would get awards if you\'re good at making these.
>> You would get awards if you\'re good at these activities.
I\'m not sure these activities actually would have helped others to save water
>> I\'m not sure whether these activities actually helped others to save water.
but as much as me, I had thought how I spent water in water-needed situation such as in a shower, washing hands while doing these activities.
>> However, as for me, I was always careful of how much I water I used while taking a shower, washing my hands and other similar activities.
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