Water sports

2011-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

학생이 쓴 원문

I rided a wakeboard and a flyfish at last weekends. I was very exiting and active.I went with friends. Priority, we were ready to exercise.Then first watersports rided on a simple flyfish. A flyfish is that a motorboat tow a tube couching people above river.Beacuse of the speed of th fastest boat ride tubes carrying attended lying.At hot summer someday,I make my mind open and I feel like the sky.I sorry because of too short time to ride. Then a wakeboard of main water sports became the time. Due to suffer a first thing,I'm afraid I was not easy the first attempt because of a fear of water.It's in front of the motor boat and followed by a rope on a boarding person. I think once we master the too low, and then decided to pledge. The master should also decided to work hard next time.

강사 첨삭

Hello! You did a good job in writing this! These activities sound like a lot of fun. These are some corrections: -T.Kelly- I rided a wakeboard and a flyfish at last weekends. >> I rode a wakeboard and did flyfishing at last weekends.I was very exiting and active. >>Correct I went with friends. >>CorrectPriority, we were ready to exercise. >>The priority was exercise. Then first watersports rided on a simple flyfish. >>The frist watersport we tried was simple flyfishing. A flyfish is that a motorboat tow a tube couching people above river. >> A flyfish is that a motorboat that tows a tube carrying people above a river. Beacuse of the speed of th fastest boat ride tubes carrying attended lying. >> Because of the speed of the fastest boat ride, the tube뭩 riders are supposed to be lying. At hot summer someday,I make my mind open and I feel like the sky. >>Some hot summer days, I open my mind open and I feel like the sky. I sorry because of too short time to ride. >>I feel sorry because the time to ride was too short.Then a wakeboard of main water sports became the time. >>Then, the time to rode a wakeboard came.Due to suffer a first thing, I'm afraid I was not easy the first attempt because of a fear of water. >> Because I suffered the first time, I'm afraid it was not easy for the first attempt because I was afraid of the water. It's in front of the motor boat and followed by a rope on a boarding person. >>A person boarding a wakeboard is behind a motor boat.I think once we master the too low, and then decided to pledge. >> I think once we master them, and then we can decide to pledge.The master should also decided to work hard next time. >> The master should also decide to work hard next time.

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