Water sports
학생이 쓴 원문
I rided a wakeboard and a flyfish at last weekends.
I was very exiting and active.I went with friends.
Priority, we were ready to exercise.Then first watersports rided on a simple flyfish. A flyfish is that a motorboat tow a tube couching people above river.Beacuse of the speed of th fastest boat ride tubes carrying attended lying.At hot summer someday,I make my mind open and I feel like the sky.I sorry because of too short time to ride.
Then a wakeboard of main water sports became the time.
Due to suffer a first thing,I'm afraid I was not easy the first attempt because of a fear of water.It's in front of the motor boat and followed by a rope on a boarding person.
I think once we master the too low, and then decided to pledge.
The master should also decided to work hard next time.
강사 첨삭
Hello!
You did a good job in writing this! These activities sound like a lot of fun. These are some corrections:
-T.Kelly-
I rided a wakeboard and a flyfish at last weekends.
>> I rode a wakeboard and did flyfishing at last weekends.I was very exiting and active.
>>Correct
I went with friends.
>>CorrectPriority, we were ready to exercise.
>>The priority was exercise.
Then first watersports rided on a simple flyfish.
>>The frist watersport we tried was simple flyfishing.
A flyfish is that a motorboat tow a tube couching people above river.
>> A flyfish is that a motorboat that tows a tube carrying people above a river.
Beacuse of the speed of th fastest boat ride tubes carrying attended lying.
>> Because of the speed of the fastest boat ride, the tube뭩 riders are supposed to be lying.
At hot summer someday,I make my mind open and I feel like the sky.
>>Some hot summer days, I open my mind open and I feel like the sky.
I sorry because of too short time to ride.
>>I feel sorry because the time to ride was too short.Then a wakeboard of main water sports became the time.
>>Then, the time to rode a wakeboard came.Due to suffer a first thing, I'm afraid I was not easy the first attempt because of a fear of water.
>> Because I suffered the first time, I'm afraid it was not easy for the first attempt because I was afraid of the water.
It's in front of the motor boat and followed by a rope on a boarding person.
>>A person boarding a wakeboard is behind a motor boat.I think once we master the too low, and then decided to pledge.
>> I think once we master them, and then we can decide to pledge.The master should also decided to work hard next time.
>> The master should also decide to work hard next time.
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