We are often told that \"you can\'t buy happiness\". If you were richer, do you think you would be h
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I think, of course, Money can\'t buy happiness.
However, nowadays people say It can buy the part of happiness.
Because crying in the car, which is Benz or Lamborghini is better than crying on the bicycle.
Even if I feel like blue, I can spend time shopping or reading a book or something peacefully.
If I am not rich, so I have no time to do that, I have to work even if my feeling is blue. Then, I think It sounds like more and more stressful.
Thus, of course, Money can\'t buy happiness or friends or something, but It makes people feeling better.
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>>Of course, I think money can\'t buy happiness.
However, nowadays people say It can buy the part of happiness.
>>However,nowadays people say it can buy a part of our happiness.
>>They said crying in a car like Benz or Lamborghini is better than crying on a bicycle.
>>Even if I feel blue, I can spend time shopping or reading a book peacefully.
>>If I am not rich, I will not have time to do that and I will feel blue.
Then, I think It sounds like more and more stressful.
>>Then, I think it sounds more stressful.
>>Thus, money can\'t buy happiness or friends but it makes people\'s feeling better.
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