We can make our lives more rich by doing something eagerly.
학생이 쓴 원문
We can make our society more rich by doing cooperation.
I believe that I can make my life a success.
The negro singer michelle jackson sang a song which is meant to similiar meaing to this topic.
I remembered that song which was heard when I was a kid in the T.V.
TV makes men\'s life throughly ruined.
Thanks for reading.
bye.
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Good evening, [이름]. You were doing a wonderful job in doing your homework. Keep sharing your thoughts!^_^
We can make our lives more rich by doing something eagerly.
>>>We can make our lives richer by doing something eagerly.
We can make our society more rich by doing cooperation.
>>>We can make our society richer by cooperating.
I believe that I can make my life a success.
>>>I believe that I can make my life successful.
The negro singer michelle jackson sang a song which is meant to similiar meaing to this topic.
>>>The Black-American singer Michael Jackson sang a song which has similar meaning to this topic.
I remembered that song which was heard when I was a kid in the T.V.
>>>I remembered that song which I heard when I was a kid on the TV.
TV makes men\'s life throughly ruined.
>>>TV makes men\'s life thoroughly ruined.
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