We have to rather for online shopping.
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Hi, [이름]! :)
Thank you very much for answering our essay homework about online shopping and local businesses.
I think both methods have their advantages and disadvantages but most people actually gravitate to the method that is most convenient for them.
Nowadays, since most people are often busy with work and schooling, online shopping is becoming very popular because it is easy, convenient and time-saving.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great. ^^
See you again on Thursday.
~Teacher Charry :)
Online shopping is convenient and easy, so you can see benefits when you develop it.
>> CORRECT!
Online shopping is more extensive than local business.
>> Online shopping is more extensive than a local business.
Online shopping allows you to buy it at a lower price than local business.
>> Online shopping allows you to buy items/products at a lower price than in a local business.
In addition, online shopping opens 365 days.
>> In addition, online shopping stores are open for 365 days.
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