We need clocks because of a comfortable life.
학생이 쓴 원문
If we use a clocks, it will be more comfortable, because we can get a school at right time, also we can get good score to people. Being a punctual people is important, because if I became a udult I have to done the work very quickly. If we don\'t do our task we won\'t make a good impression on others. Back to square one, if the clock disappears in the world, it will be confusing. People won\'t be able to keep time because they don\'t know what time it is. Like this, if there is no clock our life begin to uncomfortable.
강사 첨삭
Maria, hi!
We get more organized when we have clocks and the time synchronized because we can do things accordingly to the time we set.
If we love following time, not having a clock is going to be a problem.
I am sure you always follow time and your clock as well as your time table.
I am grateful for this composition. See you soon.
-T. Donna =)
>> If we use clocks, it will be more comfortable because we can get TO school at right time. Also, we can get good impression from people.
Being a punctual people is important, because if I became a udult I have to done the work very quickly.
>> Being a punctual person is important, because if I became an adult I have to do the work very quickly.
If we don\'t do our task we won\'t make a good impression on others.
>> Correct!
Back to square one, if the clock disappears in the world, it will be confusing. People won\'t be able to keep time because they don\'t know what time it is.
>> Correct!
Like this, if there is no clock our life begin to uncomfortable.
>> Therefore, if there is no clock in our life, it begins to be uncomfortable.
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