We should help each other for better society.
학생이 쓴 원문
Helping other is very hard like me as a novice to society.
I will help someone but it is a behavior wanting for a reward.
Our society will be brighter if we live helping each other if we do as we have learned.
But I think real world is a bit different as we have learned.
We have to work to make our living sustained.
Thanks for reading.
bye.
강사 첨삭
Hello Hyong [이름]. I appreciate your effort in doing your homework. Your ideas were interesting so keep on sharing them and at the same time, you are also practicing your skills.
Helping other is very hard like me as a novice to society.
>>>Helping others is very hard for me as a novice to society.
I will help someone but it is a behavior wanting for a reward.
>>>CORRECT!
OR>>> I help someone because I want to be rewarded.
Our society will be brighter if we live helping each other if we do as we have learned.
>>>Our society will be brighter if we live helping each and do as we have learned.
But I think real world is a bit different as we have learned.
>>>But I think, a real world is a bit different from what we have learned.
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