Wealth and Poverty(2)

But, We must assure about this problem. Many people suffer from poverty and die in poor. Major country and UN aid to some of poor country, It is not perfect solution. I think If we make award like a Novel prize award that honor for contribution, process international campaign , the global companies employ people from poverty countries's youth and invest in poor country, I bet It has a favorable influence upon This circumstances. And citizen of the world are award that they should be responsible for 'Wealth and Poverty'. --------- It is heavy subject.But I think we should be cognizant of this problem.Thanks, and I want to talk with you as soon as possible ! >_< See you and take care Marie !!♡

Hello [이름]! Thank you for your message. It's great to know that you are aware of this devastatingly endless problem that our world is having. I think you're right about that's successful global companies should take the initiative to help out those countries in need. Giving the poor people jobs may not be the best idea but it could definitely make some improvement. I corrected your grammar and sentences here. Check them out and see what you need to work on. Take care [이름]! Talk to you tomorrow! CIAO! =T. Marie=   Wealth and Poverty(2) >> correct But, We must assure about this problem. >>  We must have assurance regarding this problem. ** Don't start your sentence with a But. Many people suffer from poverty and die in poor. >> Many people suffer from poverty and they die poor. Major country and UN aid to some of poor country, >> Major countries and the UN should help the poor countries. It is not perfect solution. >> It is not a perfect solution. I think If we make award like a Novel prize award that honor for contribution, process international campaign , the global companies employ people from poverty countries's youth and invest in poor country, >> I think there should be an award like the Nobel prize award, which will honor the contribution and process of international campaign. The global companies should employ people from poor countries and invest in these countries too. I bet It has a favorable influence upon This circumstances. >> I bet this will have a favorable influence in this situation.And citizen of the world are award that they should be responsible for 'Wealth and Poverty'. >> The citizens of the world will be awarded and held responsible for the wealth and poverty. ---------It is heavy subject. >> It is a heavy subject. But I think we should be cognizant of this problem. >> But I think we should be aware of this problem. Thanks, and I want to talk with you as soon as possible ! >_< >> Thanks. I want to talk with you as soon as possible!See you and take care Marie !! >> correct