Wearing uniforms enhances school pride, unity, and community spirit.

2024-06-19 · 첨삭 강사 Jenna

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I consider that it depends on which schools the students go to. If their school is private school and very hard to enter, they would feel pride and unity for what they wear. If not, wearing uniforms even can embarrass students. I think it could bring another discrimination in the big picture.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Ms. [이름]! You raise valid points about how school uniforms can impact students differently based on school environment. It\'s important to consider how uniform policies can either foster unity or inadvertently create social divisions.
~T. Jenna

I consider that it depends on which schools the students go to.
Correct, or
>>I believe it depends on the schools that students attend.
If their school is private school and very hard to enter, they would feel pride and unity for what they wear.
>>If their school is a private school and very hard to enter, they would feel pride and unity in what they wear.
OR
>>If their school is a private institution with arduous admissions criteria, they would take pride and feel a sense of unity in their attire.
If not, wearing uniforms even can embarrass students.
>>If not, wearing uniforms can even embarrass students.
OR
>>If not, wearing uniforms can even put students in a tight spot.
I think it could bring another discrimination in the big picture.
Correct, or
>>I think it could contribute to another form of discrimination in the big picture.
OR
>>I believe it could perpetuate another layer of discrimination in the broader context.

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